Ah, but see, this is an erotic horror story, and the reason she attacked the prince is because she needs to find a physically & mentally strong mate, and what better way to do that than to commit a terrible crime and seduce whoever the royal family hand-picks to track you down? She's not trying to start a revolution; she's trying to start a family. (It's cute in a really twisted way!)
The warrior does eventually decide to stay with her, and I want it to be an actual choice (rather than mind control or something), so I'm trying to figure out how that's going to happen.
I have another story with a totally different setup/plot but with a very similar warrior character (they're based on the same person if you go back far enough in my notebooks), and his story is that he was very idealistic when he was young, dreaming a lot about the glory of battle, but when he actually joined the military he realized it was mostly just a lot of old men who drink a lot and tell blatant lies about winning fights and bedding women, so he ends up miserable while waiting for his mandatory service time to be over. I'm considering just grabbing his backstory and using it for this character, because secretly hating your life is a pretty good reason to run away from it.
My main problem is how to spin that so that it's clear to the reader that staying with the witch is really a desire, and not something done because "well if I go home they'll kill me so I guess letting this weird lady mate with me is my least bad option".
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Date: 2016-09-22 11:20 am (UTC)Ah, but see, this is an erotic horror story, and the reason she attacked the prince is because she needs to find a physically & mentally strong mate, and what better way to do that than to commit a terrible crime and seduce whoever the royal family hand-picks to track you down? She's not trying to start a revolution; she's trying to start a family. (It's cute in a really twisted way!)
The warrior does eventually decide to stay with her, and I want it to be an actual choice (rather than mind control or something), so I'm trying to figure out how that's going to happen.
I have another story with a totally different setup/plot but with a very similar warrior character (they're based on the same person if you go back far enough in my notebooks), and his story is that he was very idealistic when he was young, dreaming a lot about the glory of battle, but when he actually joined the military he realized it was mostly just a lot of old men who drink a lot and tell blatant lies about winning fights and bedding women, so he ends up miserable while waiting for his mandatory service time to be over. I'm considering just grabbing his backstory and using it for this character, because secretly hating your life is a pretty good reason to run away from it.
My main problem is how to spin that so that it's clear to the reader that staying with the witch is really a desire, and not something done because "well if I go home they'll kill me so I guess letting this weird lady mate with me is my least bad option".